Colossians 1.9-23 Translation Now Up

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You know the drill. Translating is a communal process

On the Christ hymn of verse 15ff, I have set off both verse 19 and 20 in the same way as the rest of the hymn because it continues to use a lot of the same language: Prepositional phrases such as ἐν αὐτῷ, δι’ αὐτοῦ, and εἰς αὐτόν, as well as the εἴτε… εἴτε construction.

I’ve tried to show the repetition of the phrase “he is” by making most of the clauses that contain it flush with the left side (not indented). I’ve also tried to show the repetition of the prepositional phrases by front loading them in their clauses, but I’m thinking about placing them at the end of the clauses to give more balance with the “he is” statements. Literary style pointers would help (*cough*ElShaddai*cough*).